Morgan: I would like to begin today's review by stating the fact you put large hearts in my eyes for doing a gender cross with one of the most feminine characters I can think. Cassiopeia Kamen? I think I shall die (eventually) with a smile on my face for that one. The question, though, is can you pull it off? I learned about the divine right ruler theory. Louie the. . .Well, Louie the husband of Marie Antionette (I believe) was the one who first coined that term isn't he? When the French were trying to oust the royals. Then again, I did sleep in World History. The book was so dang comfy, y'hear? ... you so did not just mention Our Lady Peace. You are after my soul, aren't you? I think Wales and think of smelly farms. Then again, I am British. Silly, silly Wales. Haydn> When in doubt, just shout Wales! April Fool's Day, ah the nostalgia of a youth forgotten. August Fourth is a good date and it also makes him a Leo, the monarch among all signs. Oh, you even have that fact in the astrological information. I can tell you Em is going to have your head for that, though. She doesn't like people relating their characters to their sign something how stars can't do that or something. Personally, I believe in it so I like the tidbit. (Edit: Em, you know I adore you and worship you from afar and make sacrifices to you nightly) Furthermore, I think Leo is the best choice of a character like Jeremy and Cassiopeia. Ah. The family. My forte. Let us see what I can bitch about today. How does Jeremy feel about his mother? Does he enjoy her? Would he like her to fall off the face of the planet? Why does he feel a certain way about her? What sort-of person is she besides a gossip? Is she a cruel gossip or a good-hearted gossip? Does she accidentally let it slip to other customers? What other behavioural traits about her? Does she have a quirky sense of humour? Or does she cry over John Cusack movies? I used to have that monologue memorized, by the way. Now, Freddie. How does Jeremy feel about Freddie? Is he angry his father hasn't been there? Is he indifferent? Would he like to see his father hurt in a bicycling accident involving ducks? What is Freddie like? What do both parents look like? Antionette and Catherine cannot just be mentioned! You must tell us about how they act and behave. I am most concerned with a fleshed-out mother, though, as Freddie, Antionette, and Catherine do not live with him. Did you say where Freddie lives? Salem High. MAD points. Macbeth is my favourite! I love Zepplin! I WATCH DAYS OF OUR LIVES EVERY DAY! ... I really like this kid. Can I marry him? I put all immediate rights on Jeremy. Hedy> -_- oy. Oh, no. Oh, dear. He was chill. Then, you made him dislike Elijah Wood (and mashed potatoes to boot). I warn you know, if he ends up being one of those music/english combos I will burst a blood vessel. With said warning, onward ho! I'm thinking not, and I hope so, plus band isn't so bad, but if he has an amazing voice, too. Why did his parents divorce in the first place? Where did his parents come from? Where did his father go? I think I have found the one application line that will forever be my favourite: "Sometimes he was employed by payment of ice cream to wander around outside the door wearing a cardboard sandwich sign advertising the hairdresser's." Now, if Jeremy's father could care less for him, really, why does he pay for all this? Or does Jeremy's mother use the child support for said costs? Why would he run and lose? If he was well-liked and popular, as it seems, it would seem he would win, yes? Good history, though. Hedy> *makes note to be very kind towards Jeremy* Haydn> *rocking out to Zepplin* Why does he do those dumb things and act like an idiot? Is it fear of losing friends or being seen as uncool? Or is it just a natural tendency with people. Why doesn't he make his own suggestions? Would you say he is quick to get irritated or just with his mother. Why does agree? Does he just not pay attention to others? Dear me, I am asking too many questions. Don't mind me, yes. I want to do a survivor themed story for SMyth as a joke. Or Real World. Wouldn't that be fun guys? Oh, eighteen year bachelor. Can I please marry him? Do you think his hair (skipped ahead) might have a life of its own? WOO! YOU DID IT! YOU DIDN'T GIVE HIM A GREAT VOICE. *falls and worships* I definitely like this kid. He's quirky. He's interesting. He seems like a real person. Like a palm tree, eh? I snickered at that statement. So sort-of like a beanie, yes? You even answered how he can wear it in class. Very smart. BRACES! AUTO-ACCEPT! Do we even have -any- characters with braces? Hedy> I had braces in eighth grade? That is a cruel nickname. A real cruel nickname. I'm sure my demon Hedy would be glad to help him out with the department of skin care. He does sound cute, my dear. Magical stainless jeans. You should try to market those on HSN. I am very surprised you are not using purple. The colour of royalty, isn't it? Can we do hair change? I think so. Em has final call, though. First. Tell me what the attack actually does to someone. Can it kill? How powerful is it? Just a bruise? A HUGE BRUISE? Knock them out? Where does it normally hit? Can the person avoid it? Does it have any special abilities along with it? Can Jeremy miss and hit something else? What does it do if it hits another object? Would you say it'd be deadly to the head? How much energy out of Jeremy? Haydn> Can my Clavius be the one to give him his transformation item? C'mon! Cricket = cool. Judgment time is at hand. I love this kid. I love this character. I love the writing sample. I love it all, I really do. The only problem I find myself having is the fact we don't know enough about the attack. So, on the basis of that I have to give you an ACCEPT WITH REVISIONS instead of a full accept. Jeremy rocks my world. I'm glad to welcome you aboard. ----- Emiko: Funny, that. I have stars in Cassiopeia, but I guess I just forgot to type in the constellation itself... Very nice name. May the Queen Mother rest in peace. (I know Tibby would want me to say that, at least.) Good job explaining the astrological sign and showing that you didn't completely base your personality off of it. ;) Tarot card significance a plus. Gosh, do you like bands or what? Love the family detail. What do mom and dad looks like, though? Uhm, nothing wrong with saying grade 12... Yes, you do seem to like bands and incorporate that into your app. XD Darkwing Duck roxxors. But he hates Elijah Wood? Somebody get me my mallet! *whapwhapwhap* Nobody rags on Elijah Wood when I'm around! Talos: *aside* This is just because she's a rabid LotR fan. At least you didn't rag on Sean Bean or Sean Astin. Then you never would have heard the end of it. Did you say something, birdboy!!!? Talos: Um, no. *exits* Where was I? Ah, yes, you wuz raggin' on da hobbit. :P Mushrooms and mashed potatoes? Now youre picking on them, too??? *pulls out mallet again and starts whapping things* Potatoes are a staple of every Irish American's diet! I'm half-Irish! Feel my wrath! *whapwhapwhap* Ahem. Geez, he really likes bands, doesn't he? I'll bet he's been sending cryptic fanmail to these people. I like Gap. They sell pants that fit me perfectly. Not easy to do in Roanoke when you're a small person like me. Granted, I can only get good clothes at Gap Kids, but still... To be honest, I've never heard anything about Andrew Lewis Middle School, but it exists. Solid history. Thorough, interesting, and coherent. Freak has a wonderful website. I think everyone should read it. ^^ "Queen? ... I dunno, I don't mind them. ... Who?" (At this point, Jeremy goes storming off...) So he's a real jump over the bridge type of person... Mediocre. *regional spelling champ* I really like all the detail on his interaction, it's really good. Thin ice? Um, 65 is passing... He's a little bit under thin ice. Doesn't he get good grades in band or something, though, that would bring up his average? I'm not familiar with "Christmas in Kilarney." *shrug* Whoa, now you're throwing in a ton of details... but I can follow so iz all good. I do think the personality almost seemed like a jumble of external information, but somehow you got the core areas across. (I think up towards the top mostly.) You really seem to have throught all his quirks out. I'm surprised his mom hasn't taken to trying to mess with his hair. I'm sure Jeremy would shut her down quickly, but still. Wow, where did this guy get his vanity? Must be mostly from his good dress sense... Sense in covering himself up, the poor dear. Seems like maybe he should stay away from beds since they scar him. Quite frankly, he may not be the most attractive person, but I think he looks interesting, and he certainly acts it, so your concluding sentence is dead-on. Magical stainless jeans! XD He has one goofy fuku, rather girlish in flavor, but I like it! HOLY MACKEREL CRAP, he has the Sovereign's Orb?? Hell, if that were my transformation item, I'd have pawned it in a second! It must be worth millions! (Naturally, I assume it's a replica, not the original, but by the gods, it's still worth MO-NEY!) We are amused! Hummmmmmm, I think that power may be a little too dangerous. With that density, weight, speed, and force, it could probably shatter someone's head. You must do something different with this power. And please detail the effects. In writing sample, minor grammatical thing -- Change: "Get your greasy face off my glass." said Derek.. To: "Get your greasy face off my glass," said Derek... Etc. But otherwise writing is good. In conclusion, I love your app, I love your sense of humor, I love Jeremy, and I'm going with Accept with Revision to that power. ----- Angie: *uncaps red pen* Right, then. Let's see how many of these I can get done tonight. *grins* I like the whole guy as Cassiopeia thing. She was -such- a, well, stereotypical girly girl character. Good name and funky reasoning though I am puzzled as to why the french for queen. *shrugs* Um, overload on the astrology info. It's nice and quick and all but it feels superfluous. No one fits their sign -that- well; it's just busy words when I'm sure you're going to do lovely things with the personality proper... Oh, we're just -milking- the royalty thing, aren't we? *giggles* Very cool range of likes and dislikes. Cool enough, in fact, that he shall not be smited for not liking Elijiah. Rayya: Whoops. Sorry, I'm late. *holds up a Moutain Dew and Pirin tablets* But I brought Angie's meds. Imperious little monkey, isn't he? *giggles* Mite obsessive with his holy trinity of music. I like it. Heck, I know people like that! The personality is occasionally all over the place but it's very well done indeed and I love him... Very all over the place as in organization went poof in places but it's coherent enough and he's charming enough that I forgive it all. Wow! He's not a supermodel hottie boy! Hurray! Rayya: *whispers* *looks offended* I do -not-. It was everyone else that decided he was hot on legs. Anyway, I like Jeremy. Mucho average and mucho character. Stainless jeans and floating sleeves... Where do I put in my order for them? Powers... Okay, I think 250 mph is a tad fast and destructive for Sovereign's Orb but that could be me... Though if that's his only power (poor boy!), he needs all the help he can get. Sure we couldn't rig him up with another power? Just a little one? I feel so bad for him! Well, short and to the point with this verdict. Accept. Though I'd adore seeing another power for the poor guy.