Colin:
To be frank, there were a little more than a couple of things about 
this app that bothered me...

First of all, why did Aunt and Uncle take Troy in if they didn't even 
really like his mom in the first place? It just seems to come out of 
no where, unless his Aunt is deeply disturbed and all about venting 
anger on her sister's son in place of her sister... Could you give us 
more details about that situation? And a few more details about Aunt 
and Uncle's personality wouldn't hurt either.

While I'm thinking about personality, I don't really have an image of 
Troy from what you give me. How does he deal with the 'real' world? 

Is he one of those naturally good looking people? This is an rpg, not 
a modeling contract. Give him flaws; my mental of image of hot might 
not match up with yours--drop the Josh Hartnett reference...

Same goes for the fuku; I simply don't like it and believe it to be a 
powder blue version of the outfit from the Matrix; as a matter of 
fact, just drop all references to pop culture.

The transformation is pretty decent, but I don't understand 
the 'looks like water but is thick and not transparent' bit. How many 
times does the gel cover his body---one or twice? I can't tell.

Ice and Water, while having the same chemical formula, are two 
different things. If you choose 'water' as your power base, use the 
liquid stuff! Waterfall is okay, but make it go away after being hit 
with two or three non-fire based attacks in addition to it's 30 
second duration, and I'd drop the reflective quality, because have 
you seen a waterfall throw something back before?

Your writing sample, while being very coherent at points lacks 
grammatical mechanics, along with a bunch of places in this 
application. If you don't care enough to capitalize things that 
should be and type the apostrophe in your possesives and 
contractions, it tells me that you don't care about your work. If you 
go to the trouble of writing this long document, going back and 
checking over it should be expected...

Reject for revisions, grammar