Morgan: For the love of the spork; ACCEPT. ACCEPT. ACCEPT. Hedy> I think Morgan has found her true love. *_* *still chanting accept* ' ----- Emiko: This is the last time I want to read this. Seriously. I went with an accept last time; I don't think I can go through it again! XD Plus, my brain hurts from reviewing EVERY SINGLE FRIGGIN FRELLING APP of the past TWO MONTHS!!! That's a lot of reviewing. But I have to because not enough people review apps. Am I bitching? Holy mackerel crap yes. And then you have the crazies like me who volunteer to review every app... I just want a system where everyone reviews a few apps a month or week or whatever and they all get done! A co-op! Talos: Ahem. Are you done? Yes. Now, where were we? Talos: App reviewing. Okay. Blah blah blah, looks good, it's 5am... Good, you fixed the age thing on Alfie. Let's hope the tattoo mistake is gone. Ya know, the boxing title is about as fun for enemy senshi as the boxing skill... XD In fact, I think the mere skill is more frightening. Sojourn is the title of a most excellent comic. Read it if you get the chance. Okay, you said he went to Fleming, which means he should already know there are black people in Roanoke. Fleming is, after all, 60% black. (And before anyone starts getting political, my friends at school call themselves black, since African American is a mouthful for anyone. And while I could go around calling myself Irish Russian American, I settle with white.) So, anyway, he already knows there are black people in Roanoke. Try "clubs" or "midnight pizza" and you'll have two things most clueless people don't realize about downtown. You make a whole long note and then say to forget it? XD;;; Okay, looks like the whole tattoo is gone. Fine by me. The armor description finally makes a lot more sense. A seven inch circumference on each spike? Those things are huge at the base! How can he move with such behemoths attached to his back? Their sheer size makes them unwieldy. I don't think it looks like thay have a seven inch circumference at the base in your pic... I wanna say Ch-thonic anyway! :P I think I follow your alteration. We'll see. I wish I knew why Cy was helping the Grigori instead of the other Angelus. Well, I'm going Accept with Revisions. I just want a few details here and there, really. The stuff I mentioned. Now let me never see this app on the list again! ----- Angie: You need one more review? I'm your gal. *twirls red pen, beams* Into the breach, my friends! Rayya: ... Angie? Stop being so melodramatic and let's pay attention to this poor guy, huh? *mutters* Pot and the bloody kettle, I'm telling you. Okay... *nods* Uh huh. Doooyyyyyllllleeee! *giggles* Okay, moving on. Older is good and you pay attention to our whining about the proliferation of Aries kiddies. *beams* Good basics on the folks but how does he feel about them and vice versa... Unless you put that in the history... And he didn't kill himself with that class load. Huh. I'd say something about the oddness of his double major but who am I to talk? Rayya: *beams* Exactly, Miss Biology/English. Hush. *nods, skims* I remember all this good stuff... Except the study abroad thing which I shall soon find out about, huh? ... Conditioning was visiting his mom at the bar? *blinks* He was working on his elbow muscles? *blinks again* His dad was an academic and saw no problems with buying training equipment. I'm puzzled. ... I'm sure there are other amateur boxers in Virginia. There have - got- to be. *giggles* But I think it'd be much fun for a senshi to wear a pretty gold title belt oh-so-proudly. Let the poor kid come close to his dream... Then dash it! *beams* Rayya: *twitches* Can I be adopted? Pretty please? Uh, how on -earth- did he graduate on time with a double major -and- a minor while spending his final semester in Africa and stay sane? *twitches at the memory of workloads* Still, very impressive and, thankfully, working the zoo concept in more naturally... Oh, I thin the natives knew well enough about the species. I'm quite sure they just never bothered telling the egg-heads. Rayya: Angie? -You're- an egg-head. Phbt. Can I find a monkey in the jungle and keep it? Hmmm? *giggles* I see where you're going and that's good enough for me. How could he afford such an expensive apartment? And how could he possibly not realize that there were black people in Roanoke? Didn't he ever leave his bedroom? Ever? At all? *sighs* Okay, good old Alfie made him get a job. I like Alfie... You just went into a whole ramble about how Cy and Verge would meet, insinuating a main story (which would be kinda strange seeing as how usually it's the guardian-toting senshi who awakens not-so-blessed innocents), and then you tell us to forget it! I cannot. Mind like a steel trap, see? Rayya: *giggles* Yeah, rusty and illegal in 38 states. *hisses, turns back to app* The personality. Why does it feel so much shorter and unfinished than it did the other times? Or is that just me. *blinks* I understand and follow a lot of what you're saying but there are some things that still make me wonder more about him. How did he manage a double major and a minor if he can't focus? What does he regard as -his-? How far does this sense of inner justice drive him? I mean, you say he won't approach first. What if, oh, his mom was being held hostage, would he move first then? I sure hope so. He seems a very cold young man, brash and self-contained, yet he is faithful. To whom? And becoming Kasdeja surgically removes his conscience? Sweet! I can easily see the man. Good detail in the appearance. No more pretty boys! Give us lantern-jawed! Wheee! ... These Angelus -really- seem to fancy spikes. Prickly bunch of kiddies, eh? Rayya: Can I -please- be adopted now? Honestly, though, at that size, the spikes would have toppled him backwards, overbalancing him horribly! *giggles maniacally at the mental image of Kasdeja flat on his back, stuck in the ground* Good transformation. Violent. Powers. *nods* Rayya: *sniffs* Don't need that wraith thingy. I see Acacia in my dreams all the time. *runs off, sobbing* Well... Thanks for getting the peanut gallery out of my hair. *grins* SPOOOOOOON! And now I shall allow the chimp... But I'm saying "nay" to just taking him home whenever. I can't think of any zoo that would let you borrow animals. However, good job at arranging a convenient option to the random monkey situation. You picked him for his evil, wretched character but I didn't pick up on any of that in the personality section. Just a chilly, self- contained guy who would make a good enough friend... Providing you don't want to hang out with him too often... I like his name! Gah. Hanging on a thread here. I like the basics and most of my complaints are rather small. Yet I think they're significant. So I'm definitely borderline here, hovering between Reject for Revisions and Accept with Revisions. *grimaces* How's this sound? Flesh out that personality for me and reason out how a guy who doesn't have the patience for studies can do a double-major, a minor, and a semester abroad and I'll give you an Accept with Revisions.